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Guide for Writing Chemistry and Chemical Engineering Lab Reports Click here to view as .pdf. General This guideline is meant to be a blueprint for good lab reports in third- and fourth-year Chemistry and Chemical Engineering. Included within discussions on each of the various components of a lab report are discussions on a number of common shortcomings. Common problematic areas with grammar are also addressed in the scientific word usuage section. When writing your lab reports, the two most important pieces of advice are:
The two fundamental concepts to keep in mind while writing are (i) your message and (ii) your audience. Your Message: What
do you wish to communicate?
You must always keep in mind the main point(s) you mean to communicate. Keep your writing simple and to the point. In particular, extensive rambling is a sign that you either don't know the material, or that you have not organized your ideas well. Don't try to impress your audience with your extensive knowledge of peripheral topics. Your Audience: Who is reading
your report? The following format is standard for third- and fourth-year science/engineering labs in our department:
A good lab report does more than present data; it demonstrates the writer's comprehension of the concepts behind the data. Merely recording the expected and observed results is not sufficient; you should also identify how and why differences occurred, explain how they affected your experiment, and show your understanding of the principles the experiment was designed to examine. Bear in mind that a format, however helpful, cannot replace clear thinking and organized writing. You still need to organize your ideas carefully and express them coherently. A good report is a pleasure to read; conversely, a poorly written one requires excessive and frustrating levels of effort just to make some sense of it. At all times, your report should be written in the third person. That is, do not use “I” or “we.” Laboratory report writing guidelines from the websites of U of T, Virginia Tech, Iowa State, and Richmond were sources for this guideline and specific samples came from Pechenik, Jan A. A short guide to writing about Biology, Tufts University: Harper CollinsCollege Publishers, 1993, pp. 54-102. Finally, remember to submit your lab reports typed, double spaced, and inside of an RMC lab folder. Make sure all your pages are numbered and stapled together! Title Page The Title Page needs to contain the name of the experiment,
the names of lab partners, the lab course # and the date. Titles should
be straightforward, informative, and less than ten words. Use the following
format:
Abstract Section Many students may be unfamiliar with the concept of an abstract in a lab report. It is the first part of your report, directly following the title page and proceeding the introduction. The abstract, although it comes first logistically, should always be written last. It needs to be written last because it is the essence of your report, drawing information from all of the other sections of the report. The abstract summarizes the purpose, results and significance of your work. By reading the abstract, and perhaps glancing at the figures and tables, the reader gains a brief overview of paper. It should answer the following questions:
In addition to answering these questions, you should state any other conclusions warranted by your results. If the sole purpose of the experiment was to, say, measure a concentration in some sample, then it is sufficient to report the concentration, with its uncertainty, and perhaps make a statement about the suitability of the analytical technique used for the analysis of the sample. Your experiment may have had an additional purpose (e.g,, to compare the characteristics of two different analytical techniques); if so, you should summarize your conclusions regarding this other goal. All of this information should be summarized in a clear but succinct manner if the abstract is going to be successful. An estimated average length for all of this information is only a single paragraph; it should not exceed 200 words. Do not make reference to tables or figures in your report – this abstract must stand alone! Although this may seem as though it is a short length to contain all of the required information, it is necessary because it forces you to be accurate and yet compact, two essential qualities. General questions to be addressed in the abstract section
Examples The following two examples are of the same abstract. Sample one is an example of a badly written abstract, while sample two is a well-written abstract. Italicized and underlined words have corresponding explanations describing why the sentences are a good or bad example.
Ineffective: This sentence is in the future tense and needs to be switched to the past tense. In addition to tense problems, the sentence does not tell the reader much about what is meant by the term effective. What exactly is an effective enzyme? The author needs to be specific and try to avoid generic terms such as effective. Also, the author never states why the experiment is being conducted. Why is enzyme effectiveness so important? What makes it important enough to be studied? We: The first person should not be used in a technical report. Rates: This sentence is addressing what was done, yet it barely conveys any information. The author states that different samples of enzymes were tested, but mentions nothing about the contents of the samples. Was the same enzyme used in every sample? What was in each sample, and what varied in each sample? Also, what does absorption have to do with enzyme activity? This correlation needs to be explained to the reader. One last detail that should be included is the wavelength of light that was used in the spectrophotometer. Did it remain constant or was it a variable as well? Eight: This is too long and detailed to be in an abstract; it sounds as though it was pulled from the methods and materials section of the paper. The amounts of enzyme do not need to be stated, nor do the pH levels. The number of samples tested do not need to be included either; it is just extraneous information that is not crucial to understanding the experiment as a whole. The information contained in this sentence can be pulled out and rearranged to say that some samples had a constant pH and varying enzyme concentrations and other samples had constant enzyme concentrations and varying pH levels. With the controls and the variables stated you can move on to your results. High: This is just too general, although it conveys the right information. When stating results it is okay to use actual numbers. Instead of saying that the absorption rate was high, specify how high in comparison to samples with low absorption rates. Amounts: An experiment is never final, nor is it ever positive. Always avoid saying that the results you obtained are correct or definite. Instead just say that the data supported or did not support your hypothesis.
Others: This sentence is clear and concise, telling the reader why the experiment was carried out. It postulates the question of why some enzymes are more effective than others and it explains that the experiment was set up to determine what causes these differences. 540 nm: This sentence introduces the specific
enzyme being studied and how it was studied. The light wavelength used
in the spectrophotometer was also specified, telling the reader that wavelength
was not one of the variables manipulated in the experiment. Introduction Section Although this may come as a surprise to many, the introduction section of a report should be one of the last sections written. For in writing the Results and Discussion sections, you have outlined the issues that your report discusses, allowing for the formulation of an introduction to set the framework for the entire report.In the introduction you should present the background necessary to understand your work and its significance. For example, if the purpose of an experiment was to identify the specific element in a metal powder sample by determining its crystal structure and atomic radius using the Debye-Sherrer (powder camera) method of X-ray diffraction, then the introduction should include a description of the Debye-Sherrer method, and an explanation that from the diffraction angles the crystal structure can be found by applying Bragg's law. Along with background theory, also included can be previous research and/or formulas the reader needs to know. Remember to back all statements of fact with a reference to your textbook, laboratory manual, outside reading, or lecture notes. Any terms that are used within the report that are necessary for understanding the report should be defined within the introduction. A good rule of thumb—-if you don't understand a certain term or concept, you need to explain it in your introduction. The introduction needs to be comprehensive enough that non-experts are given enough information to understand the main points of your results and conclusions. Usually, an instructor does not want you to repeat the lab manual, but to show your own comprehension of the background. Don't try to be too comprehensive; write about topics that are most pertinent to your experiment. Introductions often create difficulties for students who struggle with verb tenses. These two points should help you navigate the introduction:
Finally, after presenting the relevant background, you should conclude the introduction by describing the purpose of the experiment in one or two sentences, outlining the question(s) being addressed. Stating the question or questions that are to be answered by the experiment can easily be introduced with the phrase "In this experiment" or "In this study" and then explaining from there. These statements should be as specific as possible to explain what the experiment does and how the results will be interpreted. The objectives of the experiment are important to state because these objectives are usually analyzed in the conclusion to determine whether the experiment succeeded. Examples The following two samples are for an introduction for a biology enzyme kinetics lab. Underlined and italicized words highlight sentences that are appropriate or in need of improvement.
Enzymes: In sample one, the writer only refers to enzymes as an "important part of every living organism." This gives no information about the later use of the terms such as enzyme and substrate and this type of specialized terminology should be defined in an introduction. Digestion: This sentence does not belong in the introduction section because the experiment does not deal with any type of digestive enzymes, nor does it matter that other studies have been performed on enzymes unless they directly relate to this particular experiment. All information presented in an introduction should be relevant to the report. Experiment: This sentence is an attempt to state the question that the experiment tries to answer; however, it only summarizes what the experimenters actually did rather than what the purpose of the experiment was. It is true that the experiment altered the concentration of the enzyme, but the reason behind it was to observe the effects of those changes on reaction rates. Information pertaining to the purpose of the experiment is the type of information that this statement should contain. Goal: The writer makes a serious mistake by assuming that the experiment is going to prove something about enzymes. Nothing is proven, especially not by one experiment, so in writing a report it needs to be explained that the experimenters only observed the experimental results and then interpreted them.
Campbell: In sample one there are no references to any outside sources, whereas sample two refers often to a text by Campbell. All factual statements should be backed with references to show that the information has been obtained from a credible source. An enzyme: This is a good example of defining specialized terms that are important to the experiment. This definition of an enzyme gives enough information so that the reader can understand the purpose of the experiment, but not so much information that it does not apply to the experiment. In the first experiment: This is a very concise statement of the question that the experiment attempts to answer, and it begins with that most commonly used convention of "in this experiment." This is an appropriate statement because it is specific about the experiment and demonstrates a clear understanding that the purpose is not only to alter the amounts of catecholase but, in addition, to observe how these changes affect reaction rates. Environmental: This explanation of the relationship
between the shape of a protein and the utilization of its active site
is important to understanding how pH could affect enzyme activity. Introductions
should always contain the information necessary for understanding the
entire experiment and report. When in doubt, ask your professor how specific
you should be in the introduction section. Results Section This is the section in which you will want to present your findings
to the reader in the most clear, consistent, orderly, and succinct fashion.
The results you collect will most likely contain a story that you want
to tell to the reader in an interesting manner. Presenting these data
in a clear and thorough fashion, however, is quite a responsibility, because
you have many decisions to make as to how you want to tackle the ominous
task. And it must be done well, because without the results being understood,
the credibility of the entire paper disintegrates before the reader's
eyes. But the task is a manageable one, provided that you sit down and
think logically about what needs to be made unequivocally clear. It is
acceptable to combine your results section with the discussion section
and call it Results/Discussion. This would primarily be done in cases
where there are numerous figures that each require extensive discussion;
this method provides a better presentation of information. General guidelines for writing the results section
The ways of presenting data vary depending upon what you want to present to the reader. You should include all the important experimental data in tabular or graphical form. This data represents all of the experimental data collected throughout the experiment but not as raw material (that is, data not yet manipulated). Raw data must appear in a separate appendix. Under no circumstances should the reader have to refer back to raw data appendices in order to follow your discussion. In other words, data referred to in your discussion should appear in the results section. Each set of data requires a logically selected label (e.g., Figure 1 or Table 1) and a descriptive title. In your discussion section you must refer to each and every table and figure! Even though tables and figures can summarize a great deal of information, you should provide a "verbal tour" of all your data and results A sentence or two of explanation should be included for each table or figure so that the reader knows exactly what he or she is looking at. Proper labels must be assigned to each axis if you choose to use a bar or a line graph. Also, with graphs, if each data point is the result of repeated measurements, then error bars should be included. The standard deviation for each datum will be required. Without the level of error provided, the reader has no idea how consistent your findings are. However, in a laboratory class, often you will not obtain the data to calculate the standard deviation. It will depend on your professor and the experiment being performed. All calculations performed with the raw data must be shown in a separate appendix. Only one sample calculation is required for each different calculation. Examples The following tables and figure demonstrate some points about presentation.
Sample 2: Table 1. Absorbance Readings and Corresponding Protein Concentration values
This table demonstrates the protein concentration of each sample. The concentration of protein found in each sample is similar. This table is properly labeled Table 1, because it is the first table
that appears in the report, and it also has a descriptive title. All of
the columns are clearly labeled with the unit of measurement for each
one, but the uncertainty is not identified. Also note that there is a
brief sentence describing what the numbers are and where they came from.
Discussion Discussion is the most important part of your report, because here, you show that you understand the experiment beyond the simple level of completing it. Here you must be able to explain, analyse, and interpret. Some people like to think of this as the "subjective" part of the report. By that, they mean this is about what is not readily observable. The Discussion should be written after the Results section so that you have a good idea of what the experiment has demonstrated. This part of the lab focuses on understanding "What is the significance or meaning of the results?" Good discussions require thought and additional reading (i.e., library work). Go beyond the book and the lecture! The discussion section should definitely have a statement of your expected findings. This should include your hypothesis and a brief statement about why these types of results are expected. Then provide a comparison of how your actual results related to your expected findings. Here, you should state the degree to which the evidence supported your hypothesis. For example, were the results completely supportive, or were there variances? Point out certain trends or patterns that the data in your results section follow and point out sources of error and how they can be avoided. Also provide justification for neglecting data sets or points. In addition,there should be an explanation of unexpected results. When looking for possible explanations, consider the following:
A common mistake that many writers make is to blame themselves for the unexpected results. Unless you actually made a mistake following the methods of the experiment, and could not go back and correct it, do not make up such errors to explain the variances you observe. Think about and analyze the methods and equipment you used. Could something different have been done to obtain better results? Another possibility to consider is whether the experiment was conducted under factors that were considerably different from those described in the manual. Be sure to include ideas on how to test these explanations. Briefly explain a way to test these possible reasons for unexpected results. For example, if there is a problem with the methods, maybe the experiment should be reproduced with an added step. Also, mention what kinds of experiments still need to be conducted in order to obtain more information. Besides discussing the results individually and coming to conclusions, an overall conclusion should be discussed in the context of the entire experiment. Usually, the objectives mentioned in the "Introduction" are examined to determine whether the experiment succeeded. If the objectives were not met, you should analyze why the results were not as predicted. Examples The following examples illustrate discussion points both good and bad. Refer to the explanations for each sentence with a word italicized and underlined within it.
Results: This author does a good job of answering the questions that should be addressed in a discussion. For example, in the very first sentence he stated what he expected to find and also whether or not the results he obtained supported or failed to support his hypothesis. This is a good, strong way to start a discussion section. It starts off with the facts of the experiment and then later on, the author can move on to his opinions. Absorbance: A good discussion includes good ideas and also exact and detailed support of these ideas. In addition to starting off well, the author also goes on to explain the specific results of the experiment that support his hypothesis. This is what defines the strength of his discussion section. Acidic: After his explanation he presents the unexpected
results and discusses possible reasons for this data. The author's explanation
of possible reasons for unexpected results is good because it shows that
he thought about the problems. He does not blame himself for the unexpected.
Instead, he considers the methods used, presents a possible explanation,
and then justifies his ideas. Conclusions/Recommendations Section This is the simplest of all the sections to complete if you have properly completed the “Discussion” section. In this section you merely restate the conclusions made in the “Discussion” section. Number your conclusions as per the order they were presented in the “Discussion” section. No new material should be presented! A general rule is that if it does not appear in the body of the report, it cannot appear in the conclusions. Review your objectives and make sure that the conclusions satisfy and relate directly to your objectives. Remember, conclusions should concentrate on the results of the work and not on ideas such as how useful the experiment was, in your opinion. If you have recommendations they should be included in the paragraph of the conclusion from which they logically flow. If many recommendations are suggested then they should have their own section. Remember, after the abstract, it is the conclusions section that is most often read. Reference Section The last part of a report can often be the most tedious, but it need not be the most difficult. The literature cited portion of your report is very important because it enables either you or another reader to go back and obtain the sources that you used in preparing your report. You should only include those sources that you actually used and cited in writing your report. Often one obtains many sources of data when first beginning a report, but in the end, only a few are actually incorporated into the report.Citing your sources allows the reader to obtain additional information if he or she wants to find out about a certain topic you addressed. Another important reason for having a literature cited page is that it allows anyone who is unsure of your data to go back and verify that you reported everything correctly, thus eliminating any uncertainty. To clarify what information was obtained from what sources, you must use internal citation. Remember that individuals whom you approached for a source of information can be cited as well. In-Text Citation
The specific page and details of the book will then appear in the “Reference”
section. Error Analysis and Statistics In your math courses you will have discussed terms such as mean; standard deviation; confidence interval; F, t, and z values; regression analysis; determinate or indeterminate error; significant figures; precision; and accuracy. Let’s briefly review the significance of some of these with respect to experimentation, for you must discuss your error analysis in your discussion section and show all calculations of error in a separate appendix. First, you need to realize that every physical measurement taken by you has a degree of uncertainty. To determine what that degree is can be very time-consuming and so it must be determined how important it is to know the degree of uncertainty. Uncertainty cannot be neglected entirely because results with an unknown reliability are worthless. Generally, analysis requires repeating the experiments two to five times to establish a mean value that will be more reliable than a single test result. The precision describes the reproducibility of the results and is used to establish the standard deviation. Accuracy denotes the nearness of a result to its accepted value and is often described in terms of the absolute error. Thus it is possible to have high precision but completely inaccurate results. Determinate and Indeterminate Errors So what causes random and systematic errors? There are three general sources: (1) instrument imperfections; (2) method uncertainties that arise from nonideal chemical or physical behaviour of analytical systems; and (3) personal uncertainties that are caused by physical or psychological limitations. Systematic instrument imperfections can be quantified by calibration. You should always ask if the instruments you are using have been calibrated with a known standard and if they have been determined to deviate from the standard (too high or too low). Many scales and measuring devices have been calibrated but will still have an uncertainty (+/-) due to random errors from instrument imperfections not identifiable, i.e., the way in which a pipet is handled can vary its temperature and thus the volume change. This uncertainty is usually identified on the measuring device and if not, the uncertainty is taken to be +/- one half of the scale increment on the measuring device. Systematic method errors are frequently difficult to detect and are thus the most serious of the three types of determinate error. Sources of nonideality include the slowness of some reactions, the incompleteness of others, and the possible occurrence of side reactions. Many measurements require personal judgements. A systematic error example may be consistently activating a timer slow or consistently estimating the position of a pointer between two scale divisions too high. These can be minimized by care and self-discipline. In the case of indeterminate errors, they are out of your control. Even with every effort being made to recognize and eliminate determinate errors, an experienced and competent worker will find variances in his results for the same procedure. Measurements can be affected by numerous small and individually undetectable instrument, method, and personal uncertainties caused by uncontrolled variables in the experiment. The cumulative effect of such uncertainties will be likewise variable. They can cancel one another or they can act in concert to produce a relatively large positive or negative error. Numerous empirical observations have shown that indeterminate errors most commonly distribute themselves in a manner which approaches a Gaussian distribution. In such a distribution a small indeterminate error will occur much more often than a very large one. The use of statistical techniques allows for an estimate of the limits of indeterminate error from the precision of data collected. Estimating Indeterminate Errors Using Statistics
Here the sum of the squares of the individual deviations from the mean is divided by the total number of measurements in the set. For a smaller set of data, the standard deviation is identified as (s) and is adjusted to account for a less accurate assessment of the true mean (). With the standard deviation, one can define a confidence interval around the mean within which the true mean can be expected to be found. The area under a normal error curve encompassed by ± 1.96σ corresponds to 95% of the total area. In this case, the confidence interval is 95%, so that 95 times out of 100 the deviation from the mean for a measurement, based on a large number of measurements, will be equal to or less than ± 1.96σ. The 1.96 is the z value and this value varies from 0.67 for 50% to 3.29 for 99.9%. For small sets of data the z value is replaced with the t-value, which are larger than z values, and the σ is replaced with s. The confidence interval is decreased by for the average of N replicates defining the confidence limit as Thus, if the mean weight of 30 samples was 3.12 grams with a standard deviation of 0.10, then 50 times out of a 100 we can estimate that the mass will be 3.12 ± 0.01 grams; in other words, it will have an indeterminate error of ±0.01. But with a 95% confidence limit it will have a mass of 3.12 ± 0.03 gm. Accumulation of Errors With determinate errors, for the sum or difference
y = a+ b – c , where a, b, and c are measurable quantities, the
plus or minus error in each of these quantities propogates as .
For the product or quotient y = ab/c, propagation is in accordance with
the plus or minus relative error expression .
In exponential calculations such as y=ax, the error that results from
the determinate error in a is calculated as .
Thus the relative error in the square of a number is twice that for the
number itself, etc. To show how errors are propogated when logarithms
or antilogarithms are computed we take the derivative of the expression
y = log a =0.43lna where ln symbolizes the natural logarithm,
thus
or in finite increments . Thus, to report a total uncertainity in a result, both the determinate
and indeterminate errors must be combined. They are done so in quadrature
to yield an overall error: . Significant Figures Common practice dictates that an experimental result should be rounded off so that it contains only the digits known with certainty plus the first uncertain one, and these are termed the significant figures. For example, if the average mass was calculated to be 61.555 gm with a standard deviation of +/- 0.069, then clearly the number in the second decimal place of the average is subject to uncertainty. Such being the case, all numbers in succeeding decimal places are without meaning. Now the question remains of how to round off 61.555. A good guide to follow is to round to the nearest even number, so the mean would be reported as 61.56 +/- 0.07. If you had reason to doubt that 0.07 was a valid estimate of the precision then you might choose to present the results as 61.6 +/- 0.1. Zeroes bounded by digits on the left may or may not be significant. For example, if a volume is reported as 2.0 liters then the zero is significant and implies that the volume is known to at least +/- 0.5 liters and might be known to +/- 0.05 liters since the standard deviation has not been given. To express this in milliliters, only the first 2 digits are certain of 2000 ml. By using exponential notation the significant figures are clearly stated as 2.0 X 103 ml. A certain amount of care is required in determining the number of digits to carry in the result of arithmetic. First, it is good practice to carry one extra digit beyond the last significant figure, saving the rounding to the final result. For addition and subtraction the number can be visually inspected, for example when adding 3.4 + 0.02 + 1.31 = 4.7, the result is only to one decimal because 3.4 reflects certainty only in its first digit and the second digit (first decimal) remains uncertain. When data are multiplied or divided, it is frequently assumed that the number of significant figures of the result is equal to that of the component quantity that contains the least number of significant figures. For example,. In this case 24 has only 2 significant figures so the result contains only two. Word Usage In Scientific Writing This listing includes some of the troublesome words, terms, and expressions most frequently found in lab reports. Any glossary of word usage assumes that what is acceptable for some uses may not be for others. Some terms and expressions are worn-out cliches and have outlived their usefulness; other expressions and terms, though not incorrect, are not precise. In reporting and recording research, try to be as accurate and precise in describing it as in doing it. Avoid the ambiguous and "faddish." Above ("the above method," "mentioned above," etc.) —- Often, you are referring to something preceding, but not necessarily above; a loose reference, convenient for writers, but not for readers. Be specific. You know exactly what and where, but your readers may have to search (sometimes through much preceding material). Affect, effect —- Affect is a verb and means to influence. Effect, as a verb, means to bring about; as a noun, effect means result. All of, both of —- Just "all" or "both" will serve in most instances. Alternate, alternative —- Be sure which you mean. And (to begin a sentence) —- Quite proper. You have been told not to do this in grade school. But teacher's purpose was to keep you from using fragmentary sentences; either "and" or "but" may be used to begin complete sentences. And both are useful transitional words between related or contrasting statements. Apparently (apparent) —-means obviously, clearly, plainly evident, but also means seemingly or ostensibly as well as observably. You know the meaning that you intend, but readers may not. Ambiguity results. Use obvious(ly), clear(ly), seeming(ly), evident(ly), observable or observably, etc., as needed to remove doubt. Appear, appears —- Seem(s)? "He always appears on the scene, but never seems to know what to do." "Marley's ghost appeared but seemed harmless." As —- Dialectal when used in place of that or whether; do not use as to mean because or inasmuch as. At the present time, at this point in time —- Say "at present" or "now" if necessary at all. Below —- See comment about above. But (to begin a sentence) —- Go right ahead (see "And" and "However"). By means of —- Most often, just "by" will serve, and save words. Case —- Can be ambiguous, misleading, or ludicrous because of different connotations; e.g., "In the case of Scotch whiskey,...." Case also is a frequent offender in padded, drawn-out sentences. For "in this case," try "in this instance." Commas and punctuation —- Not precisely a word-usage matter except in relation to how words are put together. The trend is toward less punctuation (particularly fewer commas), but that demands careful writing, without misplaced or dangling elements. Do not omit commas before the conjunctions in compound sentences. Most journals, but not all, use final commas before "and" or "or" in series; check the journal. Compare with, compare to —- Compare with means to examine differences and similarities; compare to means to represent as similar. One may conclude that the music of Brahms compares to that of Beethoven, but to do that, one must first compare the music of Brahms with that of Beethoven. Comprise —- Before misuse, comprise meant to contain, include, or encompass (not to constitute or compose) and still does, despite two now opposite meanings. Use and meanings now are so confused and mixed that "comprise" is best avoided altogether. Correlated with, correlated to —- Although things may be related to one another, things are correlated with one another. Different from, different than —- Different from! Also, one thing differs from another, although you may differ with your colleagues. Due to —- Make sure that you don't mean because of. Due is an adjective modifier and must be directly related to a noun, not to a concept or series of ideas gleaned from the rest of a statement. "Due to the fact that..." is an attempt to weasel out. During the course of, in the course of —- Just use "during" or "in." Either....or, neither...nor —- Apply to no more than two items or categories. Similarly, former and latter refer only to the first and second of only two items or categories. Etc. —- Use at least two items or illustrations before "and so forth" or "etc." Experience(d) —-- To experience something is sensory; inanimate, unsensing things (lakes, soils, enzymes, streambeds, farm fields, etc.) do not experience anything. Following —- "After" is more precise if "after" is the meaning intended. "After [not following] the procession, the leader announced that the ceremony was over." High(er), low(er) —- Much too often used, frequently ambiguously or imprecisely, for other words such as greater, lesser, larger, smaller, more, fewer; e.g., "Occurrences of higher concentrations were lower at higher levels of effluent outflow." One interpretation is that greater concentrations were fewer or less frequent as effluent volume(s) increased, but others also are possible. However —- Place it more often within a sentence or major element rather than at the beginning or end. "But" serves better at the beginning. Hyphening of compound or unit modifiers —- Often needed to clarify what is modifying what; e.g., a small-grain harvest (harvest of small grain) is different from a small grain harvest (small harvest of all grain), a fast acting dean isn't necessarily as effective as a fast-acting dean, a batch of (say, 20) 10-liter containers is different from a batch of 10 [1-] liter containers, and a man eating fish is very different from a man-eating fish! Grammatically, adjectives are noun modifiers, and the problem is when adjectives and nouns are used to modify other adjectives and nouns. Adverbs (usually with "ly" endings), however, are adjective modifiers. In order to —- For brevity, just use "to"; the full phrase may be used, however, [in order] to achieve useless padding. Irregardless —- No, regardless. But irrespective might do. It should be mentioned, noted, pointed out, emphasized, etc. —- Such preambles often add nothing but words. Just go ahead and say what is to be said. It was found, determined, decided, felt, etc.—- Are you being evasive? Why not put it frankly and directly? (And how about that subjective "felt"?) Less(er), few(er) —- "Less" refers to quantity; "fewer" to number. Majority, vast majority —- See if most will do as well or better. Look up "vast." Myself —- Not a substitute for me. "This paper has been reviewed by Dr. Smith and myself" and "The report enclosed was prepared by Dr. Jones and myself" are incorrect as is "Don't hesitate to call Dr. Doe or myself"; me would have been correct in all instances. (Use of I also would have been wrong in those examples.) Some correct uses of myself: I found the error myself. I myself saw it happen. I am not myself today. I cannot convince myself. I locked myself out of the car. Partially, partly —- Compare the meanings (see also impartially). Partly is the better, simpler, and more precise word when partly is meant. Percent, percentage —- Not the same; use percent only with a number. Predominate, predominant —- Predominate is a verb. Predominant is the adjective; as an adverb, predominantly (not "predominately"). Prefixes —- (mid, non, pre, pro, re, semi, un, etc.) -- Usually not hyphened in U.S. usage except before a proper name (pro-Iowa) or numerals (mid-60s) or when lack of a hyphen makes a word ambiguous or awkward. Recover a fumble, but perhaps re-cover a sofa. Preengineered is better hyphened as pre-engineered, one of the few exceptions so hyphened. Breaking pairs such as predoctoral and postdoctoral into pre- and post-doctoral "forces" hyphening of both otherwise unhyphened words. Principle, principal —- They're different;
make sure which you mean. Proven —- Although a proven adjective, stick to proved for the past participle. "A proven guilty person must first have been proved guilty in court." Provided, providing —- Provided (usually followed by "that") is the conjunction; providing is the participle. Reason why —- Omit why if reason is used as a noun. The reason is...; or, the reason is that... (i.e., the reason is the why). Since —- has a time connotation; use "because" or "inasmuch as" when either is the intended meaning. Small in size, rectangular in shape, blue in color, tenuous in nature, etc. —- Redundant. That and which —- Two words that can help, when needed, to make intended meanings and relationships unmistakable, which is important in reporting scientific information. If the clause can be omitted without leaving the modified noun incomplete, use which and enclose the clause within commas or parentheses; otherwise, use that. Example: "The lawn mower, which is broken, is in the garage." But, "The lawn mower that is broken is in the garage; so is the lawn mower that works."...That is broken specifies the particular mower being discussed, whereas which is broken merely adds additional information to the sentence. To be —- Frequently unnecessary. "The differences were [found] [to be] significant." Varying —- Be careful to distinguish between various or differing. In saying that you used varying amounts or varying conditions, you are implying individually changing amounts or conditions rather than a selection of various or different ones. Where —- Use when you mean where, but not for "in which," "for which," etc. Which is, that were, who are, etc.—- Often
not needed. For example, "the data that were related to age were
analyzed first" means that the data related to age were
analyzed first. Similarly, for "the site, which is located near Ames,"
try "the site, located near Ames" or "the site, near Ames."
Rather than "all persons who were present voted," just say that
"all persons present voted." Rephrasing sometimes can help.
Instead of "a survey, which was conducted in 1974" or "a
survey conducted in 1974," try "a 1974 survey." Beware of misplaced or dangling modifiers and pronoun antecedent
problems. Examples Modifier problems
Ambiguous pronoun antecedents
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